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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. v.1

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. v. 1
The line graph compares the number of foreign tourists arrival in five countries between 1995 and 2010. Overall, tourist arrival in these countries increased over time, and the USA and France received the highest number of foreign travellers during this period. As the data suggest, over 70 million international tourists landed in the USA in 1995 which was more than double than that of France. Malaysia, in this year, received around 20 million tourists while fewer than 10 million travellers visited Brazil and Egypt each. Tourists arrival in the USA gradually increased but a sharp rise could be observed in the case of France where over 80 million travellers visited in 2010. Despite the USA being the favourite among the tourists, France, as a destination, became famous with the rapid increase of its tourists' number. Moreover, approximately 50 million people went to Malaysia to spend their holidays in 2010 and this figure is more than doubled in just 15 years. Finally, tourists arrival in Egypt slowly increased and crossed the tourists' arrival in Brazil as more than 20 million people travelled to Egypt in 2010 while this number was about 3 million fewer in Brazil.
The line graph compares the
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number
of foreign
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tourists
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arrival
in five countries between 1995 and 2010.

Overall
,
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tourist
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arrival
in these countries increased over time, and the USA and France received the highest
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number
of foreign
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travellers
during this period.

As the data suggest, over 70
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million
international
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tourists
landed in the USA in 1995 which was more than double than that of France. Malaysia, in this year, received around 20
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million
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tourists
while fewer than 10
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million
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travellers
visited Brazil and Egypt each.
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Tourists
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arrival
in the USA
gradually
increased
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but
a sharp rise could
be observed
in the case of France where over 80
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million
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travellers
visited in 2010. Despite the USA being the
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favourite
among the
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tourists
, France, as a destination, became
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famous
with the rapid increase of its tourists'
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number
.
Moreover
, approximately 50
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million
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people
went to Malaysia to spend their holidays in 2010 and this figure is more than doubled in
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just
15 years.
Finally
,
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tourists
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arrival
in Egypt
slowly
increased and crossed the tourists'
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arrival
in Brazil as more than 20
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million
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people
travelled to Egypt in 2010 while this
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number
was about 3
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million
fewer in Brazil.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. v. 1

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6.0
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