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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004. v.1

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004. v. 1
The given bar graph shows data on the three types of calls made by Finnish citizens from 1995 to 2004. As is given on the graph, most Finish citizens made local landline calls while the mobile phone usages increased over the time. Initially, in 1995, Finnish people made 12000 million minutes of local landline calls while the national & international calling time was half of that. Very few mobile calls were made in this year. But over time the mobile calling time increased steadily and reached to about 8000 million minutes in 2003. The local calling was the most popular way of calling throughout the period but after 2001, this way of calling kept decreasing with the popularity of mobile phones and national & international calling. Mobile phone calling increased more compared to the other two ways of calling and the trends shows that over time the local landline usages declined while the other two ways of calling increased. In summary, local landline calling in Finland is higher than mobile and national & international calling throughout the given period and total mobile phone calling time had increased more quickly than other two ways of calling.
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made by Finnish citizens from 1995 to 2004. As is
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on the graph, most Finish citizens made
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local
landline
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calls
while the mobile
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phone
usages
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increased
over the time.

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, in 1995, Finnish
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made 12000 million minutes of
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calls
while the national & international calling
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time
was half of that.
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few mobile
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calls
were made
in this year.
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over
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the mobile calling
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time
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increased
steadily
and reached to about 8000 million minutes in 2003. The
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local
calling was the most popular
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way
of calling throughout the period
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but
after 2001, this
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of calling
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decreasing with the popularity of mobile
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phones
and national & international calling. Mobile
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calling
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increased
more compared to the other two
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ways
of calling and the trends
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that over
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the
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local
landline usages declined while the other two
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ways
of calling increased.

In summary,
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landline calling in Finland is higher than mobile and national & international calling throughout the
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given
period and total mobile
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phone
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had
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increased
more
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ways
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004. v. 1

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