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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry
The diagram illustrates how bricks are made for and delivered to the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with clay excavation and ending with the delivering of bricks to customers. To begin, the clay used to make bricks are dug up from the ground by the large digger. Next, this clay is placed into a metal grid which is removed oversize of pieces and dropped into the large roller. Following this, sand and water are added to the small clay and mixture is turned into bricks by placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. The process continues with these bricks are put in an oven dry to evaporate for 24 to 48 hours. Subsequently, the bricks fried in a kiln at moderate and then a high temperature from 870oC to 1300oC before going through a cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.
The diagram illustrates how
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bricks
are made
for and delivered to the building industry.

Overall
, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with
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clay
excavation and ending with the delivering of
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bricks
to customers.

To
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begin
, the
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clay
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used
to
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make
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bricks
are dug
up from the ground by the large digger.
Next
, this
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clay
is placed
into a metal grid which
is removed
oversize of pieces and dropped into the large roller.

Following this, sand and water are
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added
to the
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small
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clay
and mixture
is turned
into
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bricks
by placing it into a
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mould
or using a wire cutter. The process continues with these
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bricks
are put
in an oven dry to evaporate for 24 to 48 hours.
Subsequently
, the
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bricks
fried in a kiln at moderate and then a high temperature from 870oC to 1300oC
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before
going through a cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days.
Finally
, the
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bricks
are packed
and delivered to their destinations.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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