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The pie chart and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v.1

The pie chart and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 1
The given pie chart and table in combination depicts the percentages of fish imported from different countries to the US and total value of it in three years 1988, 1992 and 2000. The value is presented in Billions of Dollars. Overall, Canada was the highest rate of imported of fish as 60% whereas China was the lowest rate as only 13% in 1988. Also, the value of imports rose by almost double over the period. As can be seen, the rate of imported fish from Canada played a vital role as more than a half of total percentages while other countries rate of imported fish are 27%. However, China was the lowest rat of imported as 13%. The overall revenue was almost 7 Billions of Dollars in 1988. In 1992, the rate of imported fish has increased by 7% from China and by 21% from other countries while rate plummet by 24% from Canada. The profit has augmented approx 2 Billions of Dollars from 1988 to 1992. In 2000, the rate of imported declined from 34% to 28% from Canada but the rate climbed for China and other countries as 20% to 30% and 42% to 46% respectively. Also, the revenue has increased and reached almost 11 Billions of Dollars. This represents a huge increase of value from 1988 to 2000.
The
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pie chart and table in combination depicts the percentages of fish
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imported
from
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different
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countries
to the US and total
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value
of it in three years 1988, 1992 and 2000. The
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value
is presented
in
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Billions
of Dollars.

Overall
, Canada was the highest
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rate
of
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imported
of fish as 60% whereas China was the lowest
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rate
as
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only
13% in 1988.
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, the
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value
of imports rose by almost double over the period.

As can be
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seen
, the
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rate
of
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imported
fish from Canada played a vital role as more than a half of total percentages while other
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countries
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rate
of
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imported
fish are 27%.
However
, China was the lowest rat of
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imported
as 13%. The
overall
revenue was almost 7
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Billions
of Dollars in 1988. In 1992, the
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rate
of
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imported
fish has increased by 7% from China and by 21% from other
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countries
while
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rate
plummet by 24% from Canada. The profit has augmented approx 2
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Billions
of Dollars from 1988 to 1992.

In 2000, the
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rate
of
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imported
declined from 34% to 28% from Canada
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but
the
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rate
climbed for China and other
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countries
as 20% to 30% and 42% to 46%
respectively
.
Also
, the revenue has increased and reached almost 11
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Billions
of Dollars. This represents a huge increase of
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value
from 1988 to 2000.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie chart and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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