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The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. Write at least 150 words. v.2

The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 2
The figure illustrates how to set up a water clock. Overall, there are seven steps in the whole process which involves a faucet, a stand attaching two plastic bottles one of which has a hole at its bottom as well as another hole on its side near its neck area and the other bottle has its neck cut off. In the first stage, the faucet would be turn on to drip water into the first bottle which is taped at the top part of the stand. Then, fingers should be used to cover the bottom hole, so that water can fulfil the bottle. When the water is full up to the side hole which is glued with a straw, this straw would keep the water from overflowing and help it to maintain at a constant level. Next, fingers should be moved away to let the water drop into the second bottle which is put at the bottom of the stand. At this stage, the second bottle can be marked with pens at levels of water after one minute or two minutes of dripping. When the second bottle is full of water, it can be emptied and the whole process can start over again to time things.
The figure illustrates how to set up a
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water
clock.
Overall
, there are seven steps in the whole process which involves a faucet, a stand attaching two plastic
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bottles
one of which has a
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hole
at its bottom
as well
as another
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hole
on its side near its neck area and the other
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bottle
has its neck
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cut
off.

In the
first
stage, the faucet would be
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turn
on to drip
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water
into the
first
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bottle
which
is taped
at the top part of the stand. Then, fingers should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to cover the bottom
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hole
,
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so
that
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water
can fulfil the
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bottle
. When the
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water
is full up to the side
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hole
which
is glued
with a straw, this straw would
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keep
the
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water
from overflowing and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
it to maintain at a constant level.

Next
, fingers should be
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moved
away to
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let
the
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water
drop into the second
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bottle
which
is put
at the bottom of the stand. At this stage, the second
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bottle
can
be marked
with pens at levels of
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water
after one minute or two minutes of dripping. When the second
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bottle
is full of
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water
, it can
be emptied
and the whole process can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
over again to time things.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
206 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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