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The figure below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the main information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. v.2

The figure below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the main information shown below. v. 2
The bar graph illustrates the number of incarcerations in the countries of Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, Unites States and Canada from 1930 to 1980. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, over the period as a whole, the proportion remained high in the U. S and Canada. However, for Britain it remained the lowest, while there wasn’t much of a change for the remaining countries. At the beginning of the time frame, both the U. S and Canada faced the highest number of cases as compared to the rest of the countries. Canada, however, had the most cases of imprisonment, accounting for a total of 120 thousand prisoners. After that, it saw a gradual decline over the upcoming years, hitting a low of just below 100 thousand at the end of the period. In contrast, the rate in the U. S, during 1930, was 20 thousand less than Canada, however, it jumped up the following year and exceeded the figure in that of Canada. Finally, in 1980, a drastic increase in the rate was noticed, ending the period with a little above 140 thousand prisoners, which was the highest for that year. On the other hand, Britain started the period with the least number of prisoners; nevertheless, it followed a stable and gradually rising trend throughout the years, landing at around 80 thousand people in jail in 1980. The other two countries, despite some ups and downs throughout, did not end up in a much altered state.
The bar graph illustrates the number of incarcerations in the countries of Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, Unites States and Canada from 1930 to 1980.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that, despite
some
fluctuations, over the
period
as a whole, the proportion remained high in the U. S and Canada.
However
, for Britain it remained the lowest, while there wasn’t much of a
change
for the remaining countries.

At the beginning of the time frame, both the U. S and Canada faced the highest number of cases as compared to the rest of the countries. Canada,
however
, had the most cases of imprisonment, accounting for a total of 120 thousand prisoners. After that, it
saw
a gradual decline over the upcoming years, hitting a low of
just
below 100 thousand at the
end
of the
period
.
In contrast
, the rate in the U. S, during 1930, was 20 thousand less than Canada,
however
, it jumped up the following year and exceeded the figure in that of Canada.
Finally
, in 1980, a drastic increase in the rate
was noticed
, ending the
period
with a
little
above 140 thousand prisoners, which was the highest for that year.

On the other hand
, Britain
started
the
period
with the least number of prisoners;
nevertheless
, it followed a stable and
gradually
rising trend throughout the years, landing at around 80 thousand
people
in jail in 1980. The other two countries, despite
some
ups and downs throughout, did not
end
up in a much altered state.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The figure below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the main information shown below. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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