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The diagram below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. v.2

The diagram below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. v. 2
The chart outlines the number of houses built annually in Derby and Nottingham cities from 2000 to 2009. Overall, more houses were built in Derby than Nottingham each year except in 2000, 2001 and 2007. According to the bar graph, only 50 houses were built in Nottingham in 2000 where this number was around 45 in Derby. After two years, this trend changed and more houses were built in Derby than Nottingham. Until 2005, the trend remained almost the same and in 2005 more than 100 houses were built in Derby while less than 80 in Nottingham. Interestingly the number of houses constructed in Nottingham were very few (less than 10) in 2006 and 2008 while it was much higher in Derby. In 2007 a reverse trend could be observed where more than 190 dwellings were constructed in Nottingham compared to the only 110 houses in Derby. In the final year, 2009 more than 240 homes were developed in Derby while 250 in Nottingham. In summary, over the time, the number of houses that were built in Derby increased almost in each year while this showed some anomaly in Nottingham where fewer houses were built than Derby, except in 2000, 2001 and 2007.
The chart outlines the
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houses
built
annually
in Derby and Nottingham cities from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
, more
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houses
were built
in Derby than Nottingham each
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year
except in 2000, 2001 and 2007.

According to the bar graph,
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50
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houses
were built
in Nottingham in 2000 where this
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number
was around 45 in Derby. After two years, this trend
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changed
and more
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houses
were built
in Derby than Nottingham. Until 2005, the trend remained almost the same and in 2005 more than 100
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houses
were built
in Derby while less than 80 in Nottingham.
Interestingly
the
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number
of
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houses
constructed in Nottingham were
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very
few (less than 10) in 2006 and 2008 while it was much higher in Derby. In 2007 a reverse trend could
be observed
where more than 190 dwellings
were constructed
in Nottingham compared to the
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only
110
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houses
in Derby. In the final
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year
, 2009 more than 240 homes
were developed
in Derby while 250 in Nottingham.

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In
summary, over the time, the
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number
of
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houses
that
were built
in Derby increased almost in each
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year
while this
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showed
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some
anomaly in Nottingham where fewer
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houses
were built
than Derby, except in 2000, 2001 and 2007.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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