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The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle. v.2

The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle. v. 2
The diagram illustrates environmental issues created by a consumer product during its lifecycle. It can be clearly seen that there are seven steps in the product manufacturing process, beginning with planning and design and culminating in recycling and these steps have negative consequences to the environment. To begin with, the product manufacturing begins with the planning and design. Once it is complete, the next step, consumption of materials and energy resources, takes place which is followed by manufacturing of the product. These two steps consume natural resource and emit waste and CO2 which is detrimental to the environment. Afterwards, the products are packed, distributed and offered in retail outlets. The products are unquestionably used by customers who either dispose the product or recycle it. Disposal of products seriously harms the environment. However, recycling of the product reduces negative impacts on the ecosystem. Moreover, customers provide feedback in order to improve the product planning.
The diagram illustrates environmental issues created by a consumer
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product
during its lifecycle. It can be
clearly
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seen
that there are seven
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steps
in the
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product
manufacturing process, beginning with planning and design and culminating in recycling and these
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steps
have
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negative
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consequences to
the environment.

To
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begin
with, the
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product
manufacturing
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begins
with the planning and design. Once it is complete, the
next
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step
, consumption of materials and energy resources, takes place which
is followed
by manufacturing of the
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product
. These two
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steps
consume natural resource and emit waste and CO2 which is detrimental to the environment.

Afterwards, the
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products
are packed
, distributed and offered in retail outlets. The
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products
are
unquestionably
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used
by customers who either dispose the
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product
or recycle it. Disposal of
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products
seriously
harms the environment.
However
, recycling of the
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product
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reduces
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negative
impacts on the ecosystem.
Moreover
, customers provide feedback in order to
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improve
the
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product
planning.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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