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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) v.4

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) v. 4
The given graph compares the average time spend on unpaid works per week by married men and married women having a different number of children. This nonpaid works mostly involve activities and tasks like cooking, cleaning, taking care of children, housework, and gardening. Now turning back to the details, women without children spend 30 hours per week on unpaid activities, while men, from this category, do around 18 hours unpaid tasks in seven days. It is noticeable that with the increasing number of children the unpaid working hours for women increase significantly while it remains almost the same for men. This difference between the duration of nonpaid household works done by men and women largely rises with the number of offsprings. Women do about 52 and 58 hours of unpaid activities respectively per week, while, men do fewer hours, approximately 18 and 16 hours a week. In conclusion, it is clear that women dedicate far time on unpaid work than men. In addition, the higher the number of offsprings, bigger the amount of work for women. However, it does not influence the average hours of men. In fact, it drops a little, as the number of children increases.
The
given
graph compares the average time spend on unpaid works per week by married
men
and married
women
having a
different
number
of
children
. This
nonpaid
works
mostly
involve activities and tasks like cooking, cleaning, taking care of
children
, housework, and gardening.

Now
turning back to the
details
,
women
without
children
spend 30
hours
per week on unpaid activities, while
men
, from this category, do around 18
hours
unpaid tasks in seven days. It is noticeable that with the increasing
number
of
children
the unpaid working
hours
for
women
increase
significantly
while it remains almost the same for
men
. This difference between the duration of
nonpaid
household works done by
men
and
women
largely
rises with the
number
of
offsprings
.
Women
do about 52 and 58
hours
of unpaid activities
respectively
per week, while,
men
do fewer
hours
, approximately 18 and 16
hours
a week.

In conclusion
, it is
clear
that
women
dedicate far time on unpaid
work
than
men
.
In addition
, the higher the
number
of
offsprings
, bigger the amount of
work
for
women
.
However
, it does not influence the average
hours
of
men
. In fact, it drops a
little
, as the
number
of
children
increases.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) v. 4

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3 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
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