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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. v.2

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. v. 2
The provided chart shows the number of leisure hours enjoyed by men and women in a typical week in 1998-99, according to gender and employment status. As is observed from the graph, the unemployed and retired men and women had more leisure time than the other type of people. Among the full-time employed people, men had about 45 hours of leisure time on an average per week compared to the 38 hours of leisure time for women. No data is given for the part-time employed men and women from this category enjoyed 40 hours of leisure time in a week. This figure is slightly more than the employed women perhaps because of their employment nature. Unemployed and retired people had the longest period of leisure activity both for men and women and men had a bit more hours than the women. As expected the retired and unemployed people enjoyed about 78 to 82 hours per week which is longer than people from other employment statuses. Lastly, housewives enjoyed approximately 50 hours of leisure time which is more than the employed women but less than the unemployed and retired women. The graph reflects that men had more leisure time from all employment statuses than women which indicates that women spent more time working at home than their male counterparts. The graph summarises that the male enjoyed more leisure time than women and employed people had less time for leisure activities than retired and unemployed people.
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in a typical
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in 1998-99, according to gender and
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employment
status. As
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unemployed
and
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retired
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men
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women
had more
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leisure
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than the other type of
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people
.

Among the full-time
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people
,
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men
had about 45
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on an average per
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week
compared to the 38
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for
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women
. No data is
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women
from this category
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40
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in a
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. This figure is
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employed
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perhaps
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employment
nature.

Unemployed and
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people
had the longest period of
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activity both for
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and
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had a bit more
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than the
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women
. As
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and
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unemployed
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people
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about 78 to 82
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per
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people
from other
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employment
statuses.
Lastly
, housewives
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approximately 50
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women
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had more
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from all
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statuses than
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which indicates that
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spent more
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time
working at home than their male counterparts.

The graph
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summarises
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78Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. v. 2

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244 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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