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Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. v. 2
The issue of teaching method, in this day and age, has triggered a new round of heated debate. Some people argue that students will gain more knowledge from teachers in school than from other ways like internet and TV. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view. Hardly can anyone deny the fact that school lessons will provide more knowledge to students than learning from Internet or Television. In the first place, discussing questions with teacher is very convenient and clearly. For example, we should type the whole question on the website to research what we prefer to know, but the system deletes some information because of the number limitation of letters sometimes. It is hard to find the right answer. However, we could ask our teacher face to face and discuss the deeper level of the question. In the second place, teachers know more practical methods to figure out questions. Some problems in special subject need students having enough practical experience. Not all of people like to share their own experience on the Internet. We, however, could ask our teachers. They are really friendly and helpful to help their students to face difficulty. For instance, my coach teaching me how to driving told me I can find his help after I finished my class, as he knows many new drivers are not good at preventing traffic accident. Considerable though the advantages of lessons given by teachers are, there are still some negative views. Internet could provide us research service in all time whatever day and night. If you were to ask teacher in midnight, the Internet would be fit for you. But, everyone has a rest at night; no one would in that hurry. In conclusion, I completely agree with the view that while using Internet and TV can learn more knowledge, lessons by teachers gives more cherished practical experience to students.
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argue that
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students
will gain more knowledge from
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teachers
in school than from other ways like internet and TV.
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agree
with this point of view.

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students
than learning from Internet or Television. In the
first
place, discussing
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with
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teacher
is
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very
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.
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, we should type the whole
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question
on the website to research what we prefer to know,
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but
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some
information
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because
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sometimes
. It is
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hard
to find the right answer.
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, we could ask our
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teacher
face to face and discuss the deeper level of the
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question
. In the second place,
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teachers
know more practical methods to figure out
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questions
.
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Some
problems in special subject need
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students
having
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enough
practical experience. Not all of
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people
like to share their
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own
experience on the Internet. We,
however
, could ask our
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teachers
. They are
really
friendly and helpful to
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help
their
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students
to face difficulty.
For instance
, my coach teaching me how to
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driving
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told
me I can find his
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help
after I finished my
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class
, as he knows
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many
new drivers are not
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good
at preventing traffic accident.

Considerable though the advantages of lessons
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given
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teachers
are, there are
still
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some
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negative
views. Internet could provide us research service in all time whatever day and night. If you were to ask
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teacher
in midnight, the Internet would
be fit
for you.
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But
, everyone has a rest at night; no one would in that hurry.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
with the view that while using Internet and TV can learn more knowledge, lessons by
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teachers
gives more cherished practical experience to
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students
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic Some people believe that students should learn far more from modern technologies like the Internet and TV than teachers at school. v. 2

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314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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