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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.35

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 35
Fast and safe transportation system and improved communication are two important aspects of the development of a country. Every government wants its citizens to commute safely and faster while the trade and business also depends on a solid transportation system. Thus when the question arises whether a government should focus on improving its railways or roads, people seems like have divided opinions. I personally agree that a government should spend more money on railways system as it is better to develop the railway transpiration system than developing roads. Fast of all railways offers safe commuting both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of road accidents and casualties road vehicles causes in many countries are far more than that of accidents in railway system. Thus investing more on a safe way of commuting is a much more prudent idea. Rails cause comparatively less environmental damage while the road vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution around the world. Second, rails can carry hundreds of people and several tones of goods while road transports can carry only a few people or fewer amounts of products at a time. Some shuttle trains are many times faster than that of private cars and public buses. Thus improved railways would save peoples’ valuable time every day. Thirdly, rail lines are usually away from the main cities and that is why some busy cities have no other alternatives than to improve their rail transportation system. Express trains can reduce the congestions in many cities and thus investing more money to improve the railways is the only possible solutions in cities where a large number of people live in. In conclusion, I believe that a government, either in a developed or developing country, should invest on a safer, faster and more reliable transportation system and railways thus should always get priority over the roads
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and safe
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transportation
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system
and
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improved
communication are two
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important
aspects of the development of a country. Every
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government
wants its citizens to commute
safely
and faster while the trade and business
also
depends on a solid
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transportation
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system
.
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Thus
when the question arises whether a
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government
should focus on improving its
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railways
or
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roads
,
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people
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seems
like have divided opinions. I
personally
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agree
that a
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government
should spend more money on
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railways
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system
as it is better to develop the
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railway
transpiration
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system
than developing roads.

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Fast
of all
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railways
offers safe commuting both for the citizens and traders. The numbers of
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road
accidents and casualties
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road
vehicles causes in
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many
countries are far more than that of accidents in
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railway
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system
.
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Thus
investing more on a safe way of commuting is a much more prudent
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idea
. Rails cause
comparatively
less environmental damage while the
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road
vehicles are the main reason for increasing pollution around the world.

Second, rails can carry hundreds of
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people
and several tones of
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goods
while
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road
transports can carry
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only
a few
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people
or fewer amounts of products at a time.
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Some
shuttle trains are
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many
times faster than that of private cars and public buses.
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improved
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railways
would save
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peoples’
valuable time every day.
Thirdly
,
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rail
lines are
usually
away from the main
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cities
and
that is
why
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some
busy
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cities
have no other alternatives than to
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improve
their
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rail
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transportation
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system
. Express trains can
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reduce
the congestions in
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many
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cities
and
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thus
investing more money to
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improve
the
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railways
is the
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only
possible solutions in
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cities
where
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a large number of
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people
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live
in.

In conclusion
, I believe that a
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government
, either in a developed or
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developing country
, should invest on a safer, faster and more reliable
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transportation
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system
and
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railways
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thus
should always
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get
priority over the
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roads
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 35

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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