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The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use v.2

The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use v. 2
The diagram illustrates the mechanism of solar panels in generating electricity. The process involves on how the sun ray is converted into electricity, and the process on providing power backups. The main energy is received from sun ray by solar panels. The solar panels will convert the heat to DC current, which subsequently flows to an inverter. The inverter will convert the DC current to AC current. Furthermore, this device can be used to control the amount of electricity provided and produced. Finally, the AC current will pass through an electrical panel for any domestic uses. When the amount of electricity used is much lower than the amount of it produced, the excess of electricity will flow to the utility grid. This action can be performed with a utility meter. The utility grid provides backup energy to the electrical panel when the solar energy is not sufficient to provide the whole electricity usage.
The diagram illustrates the mechanism of
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solar
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panels
in generating electricity.

The process involves on how the sun ray
is converted
into
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electricity
, and the process on providing power backups.

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The
main energy
is received
from sun ray by
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solar
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panels
.
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The
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solar
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panels
will convert the heat to DC
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current
, which
subsequently
flows to an inverter.
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The
inverter will convert the DC
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current
to AC
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current
.
Furthermore
, this device can be
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used
to control the amount of
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electricity
provided and produced.
Finally
, the AC
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current
will pass through an electrical
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panel
for any domestic
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uses
.

When the amount of
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electricity
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used
is much lower than the amount of it produced, the excess of
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electricity
will flow to the utility grid. This action can
be performed
with a utility meter. The utility grid provides backup energy to the electrical
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panel
when the
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solar
energy is not sufficient to provide the whole
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electricity
usage.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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