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The diagram shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.
The diagram illustrates the various stages in the purification of seawater. Firstly, seawater is taken from a sea, after that it is piped through the pre-treatment filter. Salty water is carried then to the next stage - main treatment under pressure, pre-treatment filter backwash is returned to a sea so simultaneously The next step of water purification occurs, when seawater is forced through semipermeable membrane. Only water molecules permeate through this membrane, whereas other molecules such as different impurities and salt are too large to go through it. Afterwards too concentrated seawater is returned back to sea, in the meantime, purified water undergoes a posttreatment with lime, fluorine and dissolved chlorine, which is used to kill bacteria. Once the water is refined, it is kept in a storage in order to be integrated into water supply system. Harmful microorganisms and salt molecules are removed, that is why treated water is drinkable.
The diagram illustrates the various stages in the purification of seawater.

Firstly
, seawater
is taken
from a sea, after that it
is piped
through
the pre-treatment filter. Salty
water
is carried
then to the
next
stage
-
main treatment under pressure, pre-treatment filter backwash
is returned
to a sea
so
simultaneously


The
next
step of
water
purification occurs, when seawater
is forced
through
semipermeable membrane.
Only
water
molecules permeate
through
this membrane, whereas other molecules such as
different
impurities and salt are too large to go
through
it. Afterwards too concentrated seawater is
returned back
to sea, in the meantime, purified
water
undergoes a
posttreatment
with lime, fluorine and dissolved chlorine, which is
used
to kill bacteria. Once the
water
is refined
, it is
kept
in a storage in order to
be integrated
into
water
supply system.

Harmful microorganisms and salt molecules
are removed
,
that is
why treated
water
is drinkable.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

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