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The diagram below gives information about household car ownership in Britian from 1971 to 2003 v.2

The diagram below gives information about household car ownership in Britian from 1971 to 2003 v. 2
The graph illustrates the proportion of domestic establish car possession in United Kingdom over a period of 33 years starting from 1971. It can be clearly seen that while the proportion of one car and two or more car experienced development over the period, the opposite was true for no car. Also, the figure for two or more car went through the biggest change over the period shown. In 1917, the proportion of two or more car was lowest with approximately 12 percent in comparison with roughly 37 percent of one car and over 50 percent of no car. over the following 12 years, while the percentage of no car decline dramatically from over 50 percent to 35 percent, that figure for one car went through a significant growth fell by approximately 23 percent. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the percentage of two or more car around 10 percent. The period 1983-2003 witnessed a substantial fall in the proportion of one car about 17 percent, which was followed by a fluctuation around 40 percent. over the period a sharply development was seen in the proportion of two or more car from roughly 10 percent to over 50 percent. By contrast, the proportion of no car reduce gradually from 35 percent to 15 percent and hit the lowest point over a period of 33 years.
The graph illustrates the
proportion
of domestic establish
car
possession
in United Kingdom
over
a
period
of 33 years starting from 1971.

It can be
clearly
seen
that while the
proportion
of one
car
and two or more
car
experienced development
over
the
period
, the opposite was true for no
car
.
Also
, the figure for two or more
car
went through the biggest
change
over
the
period
shown.

In 1917, the
proportion
of two or more
car
was lowest with approximately 12
percent
in comparison
with roughly 37
percent
of one
car
and
over
50
percent
of no
car
.
over
the following 12 years, while the percentage of no
car
decline
dramatically
from
over
50
percent
to 35
percent
, that figure for one
car
went through a significant growth fell by approximately 23
percent
. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the percentage of two or more
car
around 10 percent.

The
period
1983-2003 witnessed a substantial fall in the
proportion
of one
car
about 17
percent
, which
was followed
by a fluctuation around 40
percent
.
over
the
period
a
sharply development
was
seen
in the
proportion
of two or more
car
from roughly 10
percent
to
over
50
percent
. By contrast, the
proportion
of no
car
reduce
gradually
from 35
percent
to 15
percent
and hit the lowest point
over
a
period
of 33 years.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below gives information about household car ownership in Britian from 1971 to 2003 v. 2

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225 words
6.0
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