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The diagram below give information about the Eiffel Tower in Paris and an outline project to extend it underground. v.2

The diagram below give information about the Eiffel Tower in Paris and an outline project to extend it underground. v. 2
The given diagram illustrates structural layout of the Eiffel Tower with its future expansion model while the map shows the exact location of the Eiffel tower in the Paris. Overall, as can be seen that they are planning for building five floors under the Eiffel Tower where Shops, Restaurants, Cinema, Museum and Car parking will be available. Regarding the map, The Eiffel tower is situated in the eastern part of the Paris at the bank of Seine river and also ways to other tourist location from Tower has also been briefed in this map. In diagram, the total height of the tower is 324 meter in which two platforms are at different heights of 57 meter for first and 115 meter for second platform. In addition to this, 10, 100 tonnes metal structure is consumed for building the Tower which has total 1665 steps to climb up to second platform of the Tower. On the other hand, the diagram depicts the projection for making floors below tower in which there will be provision of lifts for movement of people as well as vehicles. The access to the underground floor will be at first level beside the ticket office where we will have tickets for Cinema and Museum which will be at third level. There will be shops and restaurants for visitors of tower at second level including additional parking facility at fourth and fifth level.
The
given
diagram illustrates structural layout of the Eiffel Tower with its future expansion model while the map
shows
the exact location of the
Eiffel tower
in the Paris.

Overall
, as can be
seen
that they are planning for building five floors under the Eiffel Tower where Shops, Restaurants, Cinema, Museum and Car parking will be available.

Regarding the map, The
Eiffel tower
is situated
in the eastern part of the Paris at the bank of Seine river and
also
ways to other tourist location from Tower has
also
been briefed
in this map. In diagram, the total height of the tower is 324
meter
in which two platforms are at
different
heights of 57
meter
for
first
and 115
meter
for second platform.
In addition
to this, 10, 100 tonnes metal structure
is consumed
for building the Tower which has total 1665 steps to climb up to second platform of the Tower.

On the other hand
, the diagram depicts the projection for making floors below tower in which there will be provision of lifts for movement of
people
as well
as vehicles. The access to the underground floor will be at
first
level
beside the ticket office where we will have tickets for Cinema and Museum which will be at third
level
. There will be shops and restaurants for visitors of tower at second
level
including additional parking facility at fourth and fifth
level
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below give information about the Eiffel Tower in Paris and an outline project to extend it underground. v. 2

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