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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001 v.2

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001 v. 2
The three circular charts compare the total expendure of five different amounts for Uk school in three year: 1981, 1991, and 2001. The data is calibrated in percentum which is clearly and coherently represented. It can be seen that in year 1981 a tiny fraction used by insurance. Furthermore, teachers were spending on salaries with one forth, and less than fifth was being consumed on furniture and euipment. Moreover, resouces had used with less than fifth, and more than quater had to spend on other workers salaries. However, half salaries were spend by teachers in the year 1991, and one in twenty were spending on furniture, and equipment. As well as resouces, other worker salaries, and insurance were being consumed with a fifth, more than a fifth, and large tiny portion respectively. As far as trend was concerned that in the year 2001 more than two fifths was spend on teachers salaries, and less than a guater had spend on furniture, and equipment. Mostely, less than one in ten, less than fifth, and more than one in twenty had been used by resources, other workers salaries, and insurance. Overall, it is evident that in three charts noticed that insurance was slighting increase at the end of point. While, the maximum teachers salaries on total school was spending in the year of 1991.
The three circular charts compare the total
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expendure
of five
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different
amounts for
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Uk
school in three
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year
: 1981, 1991, and 2001. The data
is calibrated
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percentum
which is
clearly
and
coherently
represented.

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seen
that in
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year
1981 a tiny fraction
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used
by insurance.
Furthermore
,
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teachers
were spending on
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salaries
with one forth, and
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less
than fifth was
being consumed
on furniture and
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euipment
.
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,
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resouces
had
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used
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less
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quater
had to
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spend
on other workers
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salaries
.
However
, half
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salaries
were
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spend
by
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teachers
in the
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year
1991, and one in twenty were spending on furniture, and equipment.
As well
as
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resouces
, other worker
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salaries
, and insurance were
being consumed
with a fifth, more than a fifth, and large tiny portion
respectively
.

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was concerned
that in the
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year
2001 more than two fifths was
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spend
on
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teachers
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salaries
, and
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less
than a
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guater
had
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spend
on furniture, and equipment.
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Mostely
,
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less
than one in ten,
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less
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used
by resources, other workers
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salaries
, and insurance.

Overall
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end
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, the maximum
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teachers
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salaries
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year
of 1991.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS academic The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001 v. 2

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4 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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