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The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households. v.3

The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households. v. 3
The bar chart indicates the percentage of males and females by gender staying alone in England in 2011 and the pie chart compares how many bedroom in one – person households in England in 2011. In terms of Living alone, men accounted for a higher rate of people staying alone than women in 25- 49 age group and below. In contrast, this rate for females 65-74 age group and above was a higher than males. In the 50 – 64 age range, the proportion of women living alone is as high as that of men with about 50 % in each. When it comes to the number of bedroom in one persona households, 2 bedrooms in one person households in Enland had the highest rate of using with 35, 4%. While 5 or more bedrooms record a least rate with 1, 4 %. 1 bedroom consisted of as an roughly equal rate of using in one person households as 3 bedrooms with 28 % and 29, 8% respectively. 4 bedroom amounted to 5, 3% in a person households in Enland in 2011.
The bar chart indicates the percentage of males and females by gender staying
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in England in 2011 and the pie chart compares how
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–
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in England in 2011.

In terms of Living
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,
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men
accounted for a higher
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staying
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than women in
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25- 49
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for females 65-74 age group and above was a higher than males.
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with about 50 % in each.

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to the number of
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in one persona
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, 2
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consisted of as
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as 3
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amounted to 5, 3% in a
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households. v. 3

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