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The first chart below shows how many energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. v.2

The first chart below shows how many energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. v. 2
The pie charts provide information about the percentage of the energy use in an Australian household and this usage leads to how much green house gas emissions. Overall, the majority of energy used for heating, while the highest rate of green house gas emissions occur in water heating. Another worth noticing point is that the percentages of gas emissions are higher than energy used in an household, expect heating. Looking at the details, it can be seen that heating and water heating take a great deal of energy, at 42 and 32 per cents in turn. The figures of used energy are less than 15 per cent for others. Cooling is the sector with the lowest share of energy usage. By contrast, the percentage of water heating at producing gas emissions is the highest at 32. The percentages of the green house emissions are twice as high as the percentages of energy spend on refrigeration and lighting. The used energy on heating and refrigeration is almost the same. Cooling is the lowest proccess in term of gas emissions.
The pie charts provide information about the
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are less than 15 per cent for others. Cooling is the sector with the lowest share of
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how many energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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