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The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years. v. 1

The pie charts compare the ratio of holidaymakers from a region who used different types of lodging in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Overall, the hotel became the primary type of accommodation for the majority of the travellers in 1985 and 2005 despite most of the people’s preference to stay with a friend or relative. According to the illustration, more than half of the holidaymakers from a region stayed in a house owned by a friend or relative in 1965. This ratio declined over the time and dropped to 35 and 30 percent in 1985 and 2005. A hotel was a preferred accommodation for 16% of these travellers and with time more holidaymakers started to live in a hotel. In 2000, more than one-third visitors stayed in a hotel. Camping while enjoying holidays was chosen by 15% people in 1965 and after two decades it was preferred by 18% holiday seekers. The popularity of camping seems like decreased in 2005. Finally, 14% visitors picked a caravan as an accommodation in 1965 and their ratio decreased to 10% in 2 decades but doubled in 2000.

IELTS academic The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years. v.1

The pie charts compare the ratio of holidaymakers from a region who
used
different
types of lodging in 1965, 1985 and 2005.
Overall
, the hotel became the primary type of accommodation for the majority of the
travellers
in 1985 and 2005 despite most of the
people
’s preference to stay with a friend or relative. According to the illustration, more than half of the holidaymakers from a region stayed in a
house
owned
by a friend or relative in 1965. This ratio declined over the time and dropped to 35 and 30 percent in 1985 and 2005. A hotel was a preferred accommodation for 16% of these
travellers
and with time more holidaymakers
started
to
live
in a hotel. In 2000, more than one-third visitors stayed in a hotel. Camping while enjoying holidays
was chosen
by 15%
people
in 1965 and after two decades it
was preferred
by 18% holiday seekers. The popularity of camping seems like decreased in 2005.
Finally
, 14% visitors picked a caravan as
an accommodation
in 1965 and their ratio decreased to 10% in 2 decades
but
doubled in 2000.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
2 paragraphs
183 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resources: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6
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