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The bar graph below shows the area of forest logged in Southwest region and the table presents the number of forest-dwelling species in the same region. v.1

The bar graph below shows the area of forest logged in Southwest region and the table presents the number of forest-dwelling species in the same region. v. 1
The given bar graph shows the total area that was logged in the Southern region in four different years and the table shows the number of mammal, bird and amphibian species in this region. A glance at the illustration reveals that login activities in the Southern region increased over the time and the number of species as an effect have decreased. Getting back to the details, 75 thousand acres of forest was cut down in 1990 and it just doubled in 10 years. Finally, in 2010, exactly 225 thousand acres forest was logged down and this was more than thrice the logging area in 1990. The table shows that in 1998 there was 13 mammals, 27 birds and 15 amphibian species in the Southeast forests and this number kept on decreasing over the time. In just four years, 2 mammal species disappeared from the forest and in 10 years 6 mammal species disappeared. The worst case was for birds as in 2008 the number of bird species declined to only 11 from the initial figure 27 in 1998. In the case of amphibians, more than 6 species got lost from the forest in just 10 years.
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the total area that
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in the Southern region in four
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different
years and the table
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shows
the
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number
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mammal
,
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bird
and amphibian species in this region. A glance at the illustration reveals that login activities in the Southern region increased over the time and the
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number
of species as an effect have decreased.

Getting back to the
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, 75 thousand acres of
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forest
was
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cut
down in 1990 and it
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just
doubled in 10 years.
Finally
, in 2010, exactly 225 thousand acres
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forest
was logged
down and this was more than thrice the logging area in 1990. The table
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shows
that in 1998 there was 13
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mammals
, 27
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birds
and 15 amphibian species in the Southeast
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forests
and this
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number
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kept
on decreasing over the time. In
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four years, 2
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mammal
species disappeared from the
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forest
and in 10 years 6
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mammal
species disappeared. The worst case was for
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birds
as in 2008 the
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number
of
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bird
species declined to
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only
11 from the initial figure 27 in 1998. In the case of amphibians, more than 6 species
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got
lost from the
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forest
in
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just
10 years.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar graph below shows the area of forest logged in Southwest region and the table presents the number of forest-dwelling species in the same region. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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