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The pie chart below presents the percentage of new job opportunities for different professional groups in Australia in the year 2001. v.1

The pie chart below presents the percentage of new job opportunities for different professional groups in Australia in the year 2001. v. 1
The pie chart presents profession-wise new job opening ratio in 2001 in Australia. The jobs openings were classified in six broad categories including medicine, engineering, research, management, finance and social service. Overall, management jobs comprised the highest new jobs in Australia while research related job announcement was the lowest. According to the given pie chart, 36% fresh jobs were looking for management staffs which covered the highest ratio of new jobs in Australia in 2001. Next to management job openings were social service jobs that accounted for roughly one-quarter of fresh jobs in this year. Finance sector’s job opening accounted for 15% of total job advertisement which was 3% higher than that of medicine specialists’ jobs. Interestingly, engineers had only 8% jobs to apply to and this was significantly lower than that of management and social service job openings. Only three out of one hundred job reporting was for researchers in Australia. It is interesting to notice that specialists like engineers and doctors had significantly fewer jobs to apply in 2001 in Australia.
The pie chart presents profession-wise new
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opening ratio in 2001 in Australia. The
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openings
were classified
in six broad categories including medicine, engineering, research,
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management
, finance and social service.
Overall
,
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management
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jobs
comprised the highest new
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jobs
in Australia while research related
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announcement was the lowest.

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pie chart, 36% fresh
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were looking for
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management
staffs which covered the highest ratio of new
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jobs
in Australia in 2001.
Next
to
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management
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openings were social service
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jobs
that accounted for roughly one-quarter of fresh
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in this year. Finance sector’s
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opening accounted for 15% of total
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advertisement which was 3% higher than that of medicine specialists’
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.
Interestingly
, engineers had
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only
8%
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jobs
to apply to and this was
significantly
lower than that of
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management
and social service
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openings.
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three out of one hundred
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job
reporting was for researchers in Australia. It is interesting to notice that specialists like engineers and doctors had
significantly
fewer
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jobs
to apply in 2001 in Australia.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below presents the percentage of new job opportunities for different professional groups in Australia in the year 2001. v. 1

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