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the charts show the percentage of enrolments on six courses at a local education college in the UK in 2010 and 2012 v.2

the charts show the percentage of enrolments on six courses at a local education college in the UK in 2010 and 2012 v. 2
The pie chart compares the proportion of enrolments on six different courses at a UK college of education in 2010 and 2012. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest change was in the percentage of enrolments to the sports science courses. In 2010, the most popular course was social studies, representing just over a quarter of all enrolments, and although it was still a popular course, by 2012 it had fallen to one fifth of the total. At 25. 7%, nursing was the second most popular subject to study, but this fell significantly to only 14% two years later. Initially, enrolment on the sports science course was fairly low, at only 1 1. 9%. However, this figure increased dramatically over the two years to represent the largest proportion of enrolments in 2012 at 25. 5%. Less change was seen in the remaining three courses. Enrolments on the engineering course went up slightly to 18. 5% in 2012, but psychology remained virtually unchanged. This was also the case for carpentry, which experienced very low levels of enrolment throughout the period.
The pie chart compares the proportion of
enrolments
on six
different
courses
at a UK college of education in 2010 and 2012.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that the greatest
change
was in the percentage of
enrolments
to the sports science courses.

In 2010, the most popular
course
was social studies, representing
just
over a quarter of all
enrolments
, and although it was
still
a popular
course
, by 2012 it had fallen to one fifth of the total. At 25. 7%, nursing was the second most popular subject to study,
but
this fell
significantly
to
only
14% two years later.
Initially
,
enrolment
on the sports science course

was
fairly
low, at
only
1 1. 9%.
However
, this figure increased
dramatically
over the two years to represent the largest proportion of
enrolments
in 2012 at 25. 5%.

Less
change
was
seen
in the remaining three
courses
.
Enrolments
on the engineering
course
went up
slightly
to 18. 5% in 2012,
but
psychology remained
virtually
unchanged. This was
also
the case for carpentry, which experienced
very
low levels of
enrolment
throughout the period.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic the charts show the percentage of enrolments on six courses at a local education college in the UK in 2010 and 2012 v. 2

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180 words
5.5
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