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The charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.
The pie charts depict the proportion of five distinct books sold by shopkeeper between 1972 to 2012. The most striking feature to be observed is that fiction books was gaining more prevalence among adults. It can be vividly seen that, in 1972, juveniles fiction, adults fiction and biography books were equally reported with 20 percent. Travel books stood at lowest position with 15 percent while all other books reported with largest 25 percent. From 1992, adult fiction had highest 25 percent followed by children fiction, all other books and travel books with 22, 20, and 18 percent respectively. Turning to rest of description, in 2012, adults fiction led with largest 45 percent whereas children fiction, all other books, travel books occupied second third and fourth position with 25, 12 and 10 percent orderly. As far as comparison is concerned. the sale of adult fiction was doubled in 2012 compare to 1972. In 1972, the biography books sold more compare to 1992 and 2012.
The pie charts depict the proportion of five distinct
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books
sold by shopkeeper
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between 1972 to 2012
.

The most striking feature to
be observed
is that
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fiction
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books
was gaining more prevalence among adults.

It can be
vividly
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seen
that, in 1972, juveniles
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fiction
,
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adults
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fiction
and biography
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books
were
equally
reported with 20
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percent
. Travel
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books
stood at lowest position with 15
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percent
while all other
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books
reported with largest 25
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percent
. From 1992, adult
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fiction
had highest 25
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percent
followed by children
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fiction
, all other
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books
and travel
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books
with 22, 20, and 18
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percent
respectively
.

Turning to rest of description, in 2012,
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adults
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fiction
led with largest 45
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percent
whereas children
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fiction
, all other
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books
, travel
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books
occupied second third and fourth position with 25, 12 and 10
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percent
orderly.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
far as comparison
is concerned
.
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the
sale of adult
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fiction
was doubled
in 2012 compare to 1972. In 1972, the biography
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books
sold more compare to 1992 and 2012.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.

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4 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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