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The charts indicate the proportion of money that people in France, Germany and Englandspent on food and other products in 1998 and 2008. v.2

The charts indicate the proportion of money that people in France, Germany and Englandspent on food and other products in 1998 and 2008. v. 2
The given bar charts indicate the proportion of money that people in France, Germany and England spent on food and other products in 1998 and 2008. Overall, it can be seen that all three countries saw significant increases in the proportion of purchases of both food and other goods over the examined period. In 1998, approximately 15% and 10% of the money French citizens spent was on foodstuffs and other goods, respectively. After 10 years, figures for both categories dramatically climbed to 40%. In Germany, there was a mild increase of 5% of the money spent on food, at 25% in 1998, and 30% in 2008. The figures for money spent on other goods were approximately 5% lower during the same years. In England however, buyers spent only 10% on food in 1998 and 15% in 2008. Meanwhile, the figures for money spent on other goods experienced a surge from about 8% in 1998 to 35% in 2008.
The
given
bar charts indicate the proportion of
money
that
people
in France, Germany and England

spent
on
food
and
other
products in 1998 and 2008.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that all three countries
saw
significant increases in the proportion of
purchases
of

both
food
and
other
goods
over the examined period.

In 1998, approximately 15% and 10% of the
money
French citizens
spent
was on foodstuffs and other

goods
,
respectively
. After 10 years, figures for both categories
dramatically
climbed to 40%. In Germany,

there was a mild increase of 5% of the
money
spent
on
food
, at 25% in 1998, and 30% in 2008. The
figures


for
money
spent
on
other
goods
were approximately 5% lower during the same years.

In England
however
, buyers
spent
only
10% on
food
in 1998 and 15% in 2008. Meanwhile, the figures for

money
spent
on
other
goods
experienced a surge from about 8% in 1998 to 35% in 2008.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts indicate the proportion of money that people in France, Germany and Englandspent on food and other products in 1998 and 2008. v. 2

Academic
  American English
10 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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