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the charts compares the cars per 1000 people in 5 countries in Europe and the European average in 3 years. v.2

the charts compares the cars per 1000 people in 5 countries in Europe and the European average in 3 years. v. 2
The graph illustrates how many cars were possessed in 1000 people in five different European countries and the European average in three surveyed years. It is clear that while the UK experienced a drop, the opposite trend was true for Italy, Germany and the average of Europe during the period shown. Additionally, Greece had the lowest figure of cars owned per 1000 inhabitants. Regarding Italy, Germany and the European average, in 2005, there were approximately 500 people had cars in Italy, which were significantly lower than Germany and European; about 700 and 900 car owners respectively. Despite a slight fall in the next two years, both figures of Germany and European average climbed to nearly 1000 and 800 cars per 1000 residents in 2015. Meanwhile, the number of cars in Italy went up before going down to just over 500 cars. According to the remaining nations, 1000 British citizens had almost 700 cars as many as that of French had in 2005. After a ten-year period, while the UK decreased constantly to under 600 cars in 100 people, the figure in France remained unchanged. By comparison with Greece, although there was a surge to 400 cars per 1000 citizens in 2009, this figure stabilized at about 300 cars in 2015.
The graph illustrates how
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cars
were possessed
in 1000
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in five
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different
European countries and the European
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average
in three surveyed years.

It is
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clear
that while the UK experienced a drop, the opposite trend was true for Italy, Germany and the
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average
of Europe during the period shown.
Additionally
, Greece had the lowest
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figure
of
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cars
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owned
per 1000 inhabitants.

Regarding Italy, Germany and the European
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average
, in 2005, there were approximately 500
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people
had
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cars
in Italy, which were
significantly
lower than Germany and European; about 700 and 900
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car
owners
respectively
. Despite a slight fall in the
next
two years, both
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figures
of Germany and European
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average
climbed to
nearly
1000 and 800
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cars
per 1000 residents in 2015. Meanwhile, the number of
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cars
in Italy went up
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before
going down to
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just
over 500 cars.

According to the remaining nations, 1000 British citizens had almost 700
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cars
as
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many
as that of French had in 2005. After a ten-year period, while the UK decreased
constantly
to under 600
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cars
in 100
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people
, the
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in France remained unchanged. By comparison with Greece, although there was a surge to 400
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cars
per 1000 citizens in 2009, this
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stabilized at about 300
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cars
in 2015.
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IELTS academic the charts compares the cars per 1000 people in 5 countries in Europe and the European average in 3 years. v. 2

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210 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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