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the chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year old spend chatting on the internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK. v.1

the chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year old spend chatting on the internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK. v. 1
The bar chart compares the proportions of time which both British boys and girls aged 10 to 15 spend on chatting online and handheld consoles at school. Overall, school boys and schoolgirls prefer playing game consoles than chatting on the Internet. Additionally, while playing games is boys’ favorite, more girls love chatting online. It can be seen from the chart that there is a vast majority of them playing consoles at school, which is about 30% higher than those prefer chatting on the internet, account for 85% in total. The number of boys spending more than an hour on chatting is approximately 30%, just about a half of them playing consoles with the same amount of time. Almost two-third of schoolgirls chat online at school, compared with just over a half of them spend on games. Most of them tend to spend more than one hour on chatting, with 45% while the figure for consoles games is only about 15%. To be specific, while there is a mere 1% engage with games for more than 4 hours, that of girls chatting is at more than 10%.
The bar chart compares the proportions of time which both British
boys
and girls aged 10 to 15 spend on
chatting
online and handheld
consoles
at school.

Overall
, school
boys
and schoolgirls prefer
playing
game
consoles
than
chatting
on the Internet.
Additionally
, while
playing
games
is
boys’
favorite, more girls
love
chatting
online.

It can be
seen
from the chart that there is a vast majority of them
playing
consoles
at school, which is about 30% higher than those prefer
chatting
on the internet, account for 85% in total. The number of
boys
spending more than an hour on
chatting
is approximately 30%,
just
about a half of them
playing
consoles
with the same amount of time.

Almost two-third of schoolgirls chat online at school, compared with
just
over a half of them spend on
games
. Most of them tend to spend more than one hour on
chatting
, with 45% while the figure for
consoles
games
is
only
about 15%. To be specific, while there is a mere 1% engage with
games
for more than 4 hours, that of girls
chatting
is at more than 10%.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic the chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year old spend chatting on the internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK. v. 1

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186 words
6.5
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