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the first chart below show how the energy is used in an everage Autralian household. the second show the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons v.2

the first chart below show how the energy is used in an everage Autralian household. the second show the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.
The given charts show us the consumption of energy in an Australian family, and the consequence of this energy use. As can be seen from the first chart, the proportion of the heating is the major source of energy usage, accounting for 42%, the largest percentage compared with others. Following that, the proportion of energy domestic needs of water heating, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is 30%, 7%, 4%, 20%, and 15% respectively. The smallest proportion of energy use is 2%, belong to cooling. Moving to the second chart, inspire of the largest usage of heating, it is the only one which has the greenhouse gas emission is lower than energy use, about 15 percentages. In the contrast, water heating is the main reason causes greenhouse gas emission. Proportion of water heating, cooling is 32%, 3% respectively. Especially, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is double increase 14%, 8%, and 28% respectively. To summarize, heating is the major source of domestic needs, causes 15 percentage of greenhouse gas emission. water heating is the main reason of greenhouse gas emission.
The
given
charts
show
us the consumption of
energy
in an Australian family, and the consequence of this
energy
use
.

As can be
seen
from the
first
chart, the
proportion
of the
heating
is the major source of
energy
usage, accounting for 42%, the largest percentage compared with others. Following that, the
proportion
of
energy
domestic needs of
water
heating
, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is 30%, 7%, 4%, 20%, and 15%
respectively
. The smallest
proportion
of
energy
use
is 2%, belong to cooling.

Moving to the second chart, inspire of the largest usage of
heating
, it is the
only
one which has the
greenhouse
gas
emission
is lower than
energy
use
, about 15 percentages. In the contrast,
water
heating
is the main reason causes
greenhouse
gas
emission
.
Proportion
of
water
heating
, cooling is 32%, 3%
respectively
.
Especially
, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is double increase 14%, 8%, and 28%
respectively
.

To summarize
,
heating
is the major source of domestic needs, causes 15 percentage of
greenhouse
gas
emission
.
water
heating
is the main reason of
greenhouse
gas
emission
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic the first chart below show how the energy is used in an everage Autralian household. the second show the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
176 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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