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the charts below show the results of a survey about adults education. the first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. the pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared? v.2

the charts below show the results of a survey about adults education. the first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. the pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared? v. 2
The given charts describe the results of a survey which summarized information about the purposes caused adult people to study and how tuition costs should be shared. It can be seen that “interest in subject” is the main reason why the adults decided to go back to school. Additionally, the survey also shows that the most of tuition should be paid by individual. In term of the bar chart, the percentage of people, who continue their education because of interest in subject, made up 40%, following closely by the purpose to gain qualifications at 38%. The other aims including helpful for current job, to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy studying constituted relatively similar proportion around 20%. Meanwhile, there are a few people adults who went to school on order to able to change job or to meet people, at 12% and 9% respectively. Turning to the cost sharing, most of people have opinion that the majority of fees education should be paid by individual, 40%, while 35% of these fees should be helped by employers. On the other hand, taxpayer should contribute 25% of these fees to adult education.
The
given
charts
describe
the results of a survey which summarized information about the purposes caused adult
people
to study and how tuition costs should
be shared
.

It can be
seen
that “interest in subject” is the main reason why the
adults
decided to go back to school.
Additionally
, the survey
also
shows
that the
most of tuition
should
be paid
by individual.

In term of the bar chart, the percentage of
people
, who continue their education
because
of interest in subject, made up 40%, following
closely
by the purpose to gain qualifications at 38%. The other aims including helpful for
current
job, to
improve
prospects of promotion and enjoy studying constituted
relatively
similar proportion around 20%. Meanwhile, there are a few
people
adults
who went to school on order
to able
to
change
job or to
meet
people
, at 12% and 9%
respectively
.

Turning to the cost sharing, most of
people
have opinion that the majority of fees education should
be paid
by individual, 40%, while 35% of these fees should be
helped
by employers.
On the other hand
, taxpayer should contribute 25% of these fees to adult education.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic the charts below show the results of a survey about adults education. the first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. the pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared? v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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