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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v.2

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 2
The figures in the chart show what motivates adults to study and the ratio of funding for the same. Overall, it is apparent that most students are lured to study due to their love for the subjects and due to this, the largest portion of study cost must be borne by the individual himself, in their opinion. The first chart intends to show that most students are keen to study due to their interest in a subject and to gain higher qualifications. The latter accounts for 38%; there being only 2% difference with the former at 40%. Out of 100, 22 students opine that studying would support their incumbent job. For those students who profess that study would help them in getting a promotion and that it is an interesting activity, an equal result is gathered (20%). A meagre number of students, 12% and 9%, feel that study would assist them to get a new job and that it will build acquaintances with new people. From the second chart, it is seen that the individual should be the highest cost bearer for his own study (40%). Next, comes the employer at 35% and after that the taxpayer with the least burden (25%) of the cost.
The figures in the chart
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what motivates adults to
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study
and the ratio of funding for the same.
Overall
, it is apparent that most
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students
are lured
to
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study
due to their
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love
for the subjects and due to this, the largest portion of
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study
cost
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must
be borne
by the individual himself, in their opinion.

The
first
chart intends to
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show
that most
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students
are keen to
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study
due to their interest in a subject and to gain higher qualifications. The latter accounts for 38%; there being
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only
2% difference with the former at 40%. Out of 100, 22
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students
opine that studying would support their incumbent job. For those
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students
who profess that
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study
would
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help
them in getting a promotion and that it is an interesting activity, an equal result
is gathered
(20%). A
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meagre
number of
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students
, 12% and 9%, feel that
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study
would assist them to
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get
a new job and that it will build acquaintances with new
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people
.

From the second chart, it is
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seen
that the individual should be the highest cost bearer for his
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own
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study
(40%).
Next
,
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comes
the employer at 35% and after that the taxpayer with the least burden (25%) of the cost.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
205 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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