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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v.3

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 3
The diagrams illustrate the motive of adult education and how the course fees should be funded, according to the survey participants. Overall, it can be observed that the primary stirring factors for adults to study is their interest in subjects and to enhance their qualifications. The largest proportion of the people opined that individuals seeking for further studies should bear the cost. According to the data provided, we can clearly notice that 40% of the grown-ups continue their education due to their interest in subjects they study, while 38% enrol to gain qualifications. Whereas only one in five studies to improve their prospects of promotion, the same ratio enjoys learning. 22% continue their education because it is helpful for their running jobs. Finally, 12% study further to change their present jobs, and the remaining 9% study to interact with new people. Regarding the cost of the courses, 40% of the survey takers think that adult education cost should be paid by individuals. 35% believe their employers should take the responsibility and only one-fourth outlines that it should be collected from the taxpayers' money.
The diagrams illustrate the motive of adult
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education
and how the course fees should
be funded
, according to the survey participants.
Overall
, it can
be observed
that the primary stirring factors for adults to
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study
is their interest in subjects and to enhance their qualifications. The largest proportion of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
opined that individuals seeking for
further
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studies
should bear the cost.

According to the data provided, we can
clearly
notice that 40% of the grown-ups continue their
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education
due to their interest in subjects they
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study
, while 38% enrol to gain qualifications. Whereas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one in five
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studies
to
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improve
their prospects of promotion, the same ratio enjoys learning. 22% continue their
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education
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because
it is helpful for their running jobs.
Finally
, 12%
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study
further
to
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change
their present jobs, and the remaining 9%
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study
to interact with new
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people
.

Regarding the cost of the courses, 40% of the survey takers
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think
that adult
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education
cost should
be paid
by individuals. 35% believe their employers should take the responsibility and
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only
one-fourth outlines that it should
be collected
from the taxpayers' money.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 3

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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