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The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries. Summarize the information by selecting the reporting and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries.
The table describe the millions number of traveler to seven countries. In addition the millions number of tourists from UK and USA, who went to so-called countries is illustrated. Overall, France is the most popular country among visitors, and Australia, is visited by the lowest number of passengers. The highest number of American went to Canada and UK people, was more eager to travel to France. France catered 53 millions people, which 7. 4 millions of them was from UK while just 0. 1 million Americans went there. Indeed France was the most unpopular country for people of USA. Australia was the most unpopular country for tourists and make hospitality for just 3 million people, which 0. 6 million of them came from USA and UK, in the same proportion. Canada hosted the highest number of Americans, 12 million, while totally, 15 million people went there. In addition, Mexico was the second popular country for tourists from USA, though just 0. 1 million visitors from UK went there, in fact, for British tourists, Mexico was the most unpopular country.
The table
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describe
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millions
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of traveler to seven
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countries
. In
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addition
the
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millions
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of
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tourists
from UK and USA, who
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went
to
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so
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countries
is illustrated
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country
among visitors, and Australia,
is visited
by the lowest
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number
of passengers. The highest
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number
of American
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went
to Canada and UK
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people
, was more eager to travel to France.

France catered 53
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millions
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people
, which 7. 4
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millions
of them was from UK while
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0. 1
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million
Americans
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went
there.
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for
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of USA
. Australia was the most unpopular
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for
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tourists
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hospitality for
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million
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people
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of them came
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from USA
and UK, in the same proportion.

Canada hosted the highest
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number
of Americans, 12
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million
, while
totally
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million
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people
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went
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country
for
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tourists
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million
visitors from UK
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tourists
, Mexico was the most unpopular
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country
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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries.

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4 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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