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Living in a country when you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Living in a country when you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. v. 1
It is argued that there would be not only social but also practical issues caused by living abroad. While I think that several unexpected misunderstandings might lead to severe social challenges for foreigners, I hold a firm belief that technology breakthoughs can help them manage to live conveniently. The main reasons for social problems could be culture and language barriers. Obviously, foreigners who are not able to speak native languages of countries they travel to seemingly find it difficult to exchange information, especially in some countries that English is unpopular. Even though body language is probably used, misinterpretation could cause numerous undesirable situations. Also, some people might even feel offended because of culture differences. For example, while in America or Western countries, shaking hands when meeting business partners is usually meant as a warm welcome, it is considered as an aggressive sign in The Phillipines. Therefore, residents from overseas countries appear to fail to communicate effectively, and it’s possible they be isolated among community as a result. However, with the development of technology and popularity of English, practical problems for people living overseas can be tackled quickly. The first example worth mentioning is searching for directions. With some basic English and a smartphone connected to the internet, finding ways within any city on the world has never been easier. Besides, online shopping has become increasingly prevalent that goods from food to furniture can be effortlessly ordered on websites such as Foodpanda and Amazon. Furthermore, nowadays, locations are less important for work choices because people can choose to work from home. In conclusion, although I agree that differences in languages and cultures can bring about a variety of disadvantages, I believe that people could take advantages of advanced technology to ease the difficulties when living in a foreign country.
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is argued
that there would be not
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only
social
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but
also
practical issues caused by living abroad. While I
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think
that several unexpected misunderstandings might lead to severe social challenges for foreigners, I hold a firm belief that technology
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breakthoughs
can
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help
them manage to
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live
conveniently
.

The main reasons for social problems could be culture and
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language
barriers.
Obviously
, foreigners who are not able to speak native
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languages
of
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countries
they travel to
seemingly
find it difficult to exchange information,
especially
in
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some
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countries
that English is unpopular.
Even though
body
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language
is
probably
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used
, misinterpretation could cause numerous undesirable situations.
Also
,
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some
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people
might even feel offended
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because
of culture differences.
For example
, while in America or Western
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countries
, shaking hands when meeting business partners is
usually
meant as a warm welcome, it
is considered
as an aggressive
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sign
in The
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Phillipines
.
Therefore
, residents from overseas
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countries
appear to fail to communicate
effectively
, and it’s possible they
be isolated
among community
as a result
.

However
, with the development of technology and popularity of English, practical problems for
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people
living overseas can
be tackled
quickly
. The
first
example worth mentioning is searching for directions. With
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some
basic English and a smartphone connected to the internet, finding ways within any city on the world has never been easier.
Besides
, online shopping has become
increasingly
prevalent that
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goods
from food to furniture can be
effortlessly
ordered on websites such as
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Foodpanda
and Amazon.
Furthermore
, nowadays, locations are less
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important
for work choices
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because
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people
can choose to work from home.

In conclusion
, although I
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agree
that differences in
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languages
and cultures can bring about a variety of disadvantages, I believe that
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people
could take advantages of advanced technology to
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ease
the difficulties when living in a foreign
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country
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic Living in a country when you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. v. 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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