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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v.7

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 7
The provided bar graph and pie-chart demonstrate the result of a survey related to adult education. The former chart indicates the reasons why grown-ups decide to study while the latter displays how their academic costs should be dealt with. Overall, a large number of grown-ups persuade further education due to their interests in subjects while others for a better career prospect. Individuals, employer and tax-payer should bear the cost of adult education, according to participants of the survey. In details, 4 out of 10 adults continue their education due to their passion for subjects while 38% enrol in further education to enhance their job qualifications. Two such adults, out of ten, study to be promoted in their jobs while a similar ratio of people study since they enjoy learning. 12% continue further study to change their current jobs while the remaining 9% do it to gain skills to interact with others. Furthermore, 40% people perceive that adult education cost should be paid by individuals followed by 35% employers' and a quarter opines that it should be collected from the tax-payers.
The provided bar graph and pie-chart demonstrate the result of a survey related to adult
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education
. The former chart indicates the reasons why grown-ups decide to
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study
while the latter displays how their academic costs should
be dealt
with.

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a large number of
grown-ups persuade
further
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education
due to their interests in subjects while others for a better career prospect. Individuals, employer and tax-payer should bear the cost of adult
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education
, according to participants of the survey.

In
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, 4 out of 10
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adults
continue their
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education
due to their passion for subjects while 38% enrol in
further
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education
to enhance their job qualifications. Two such
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adults
, out of ten,
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study
to
be promoted
in their jobs while a similar ratio of
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people
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study
since they enjoy learning. 12% continue
further
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study
to
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change
their
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current
jobs while the remaining 9% do it to gain
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skills
to interact with others.

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people
perceive that adult
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education
cost should
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by individuals followed by 35% employers' and a quarter opines that it should
be collected
from the tax-payers.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 7

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
180 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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