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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v.6

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 6
The bar chart depicts why adults chose to study and the pie chart shows the people's opinion about the cost distribution of this adult study. Overall it is evident that the most motivating factor for study among adults is due to their keen interest in the subject and the greatest proportion of the cost of study must be borne by the individual and the least must be borne by the taxpayer, according to people's opinion. Having an interest in the subject is a crucial factor that inspires adults to further pursue their academic studies. This is shown by the fact that 40 percent of them opt for this single reason. Similarly, even the zeal to gain higher qualifications persuades 38 percent of adults to choose to advance their level of study. On the other hand, reasons like a support for their incumbent job, building certainty in promotions and study as a leisure activity quite indulges adults to study. These are evident at 22 percent, 20 percent and 20 percent respectively chose to study for these reasons. A small group of 12 percent focus on studying to be able to switch their jobs. However, the least motivating factor to study is to make new acquaintances, only 9 percent. In addition to above, people opine that  40 percent of the adult education cost should be paid by themselves. On the other hand, employers and taxpayers have a comparatively lower share, in their opinion, at 35 percent and 25 percent respectively.
The bar chart depicts why
adults
chose to
study
and the pie chart
shows
the
people
's opinion about the cost distribution of this adult study.

Overall
it is evident that the most motivating factor for
study
among
adults
is due to their keen interest in the subject and the greatest proportion of the cost of
study
must
be borne
by the individual and the least
must
be borne
by the taxpayer, according to
people
's opinion.

Having an interest in the subject is a crucial factor that inspires
adults
to
further
pursue their academic
studies
. This
is shown
by the fact that 40
percent
of them opt for this single reason.
Similarly
, even the zeal to gain higher qualifications persuades 38
percent
of
adults
to choose to advance their level of
study
.
On the other hand
, reasons like a support for their incumbent job, building certainty in promotions and
study
as a leisure activity quite indulges
adults
to
study
. These are evident at 22
percent
, 20
percent
and 20
percent
respectively
chose to
study
for these reasons. A
small
group of 12
percent
focus on studying to be able to switch their jobs.
However
, the least motivating factor to
study
is to
make
new acquaintances,
only
9 percent.

In addition
to above,
people
opine that
 
40
percent
of the adult education cost should
be paid
by themselves.
On the other hand
, employers and taxpayers have a
comparatively
lower share, in their opinion, at 35
percent
and 25
percent
respectively
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 6

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
6.5
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