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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v.5

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 5
The figures illustrate the outcome of a survey about the different intention why adults opt to further their education and their opinion on how the fees of each course should be funded. It is immediately apparent that the interest in subject and gaining qualifications are the top reasons for adults’ decision to continue their education while each individual should fund the majority of their course fees. By looking into details, interest in Subject has the highest result in the survey with 40 percent of the total outcome. It is closely followed by the reason to gain qualifications with only 2 percent difference at 38%. The following reasons which are helpful for the current job, to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy studying are about one-fifth of the total result ranging from 20% to22% while to able to change jobs and to meet people are just 17 percent combined. Meanwhile, individuals top the result of cost sharing with 40 percent. Employers are just above thirds of the total result on how fees should be shared whilst taxpayer should share a quarter of the costs.
The figures illustrate the outcome of a survey about the
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intention why adults opt to
further
their education and their opinion on how the fees of each course should
be funded
.

It is immediately apparent that the interest in subject and gaining qualifications are the top reasons for adults’ decision to continue their education while each individual should fund the majority of their course fees.

By looking into
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details
, interest in Subject has the highest
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result
in the survey with 40
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of the total outcome. It is
closely
followed by the reason to gain qualifications with
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2
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percent
difference at 38%. The following reasons which are helpful for the
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current
job, to
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improve
prospects of promotion and enjoy studying are about one-fifth of the total
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result
ranging from 20% to22% while
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to able
to
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change
jobs and to
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17
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combined.

Meanwhile, individuals top the
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result
of cost sharing with 40
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. Employers are
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above thirds of the total
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on how fees should
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whilst taxpayer should share a quarter of the costs.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. v. 5

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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