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Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore.
A quick glance at the three pie charts provided reveals the relative popularity of various means of transport which students in Britain, Australia and Singapore travel to school. It is apparent from the information supplied that of these method of travel, the majority is car in Britain and Australia, both accounting for 65 per cent of the students. In stark contrast, people in Singapore, however, don’t prefer travel by car, and it is the least popular method of transport, with a merge 10 per cent of the students. There are considerable differences in the percentage of public transport. A large figure of students in Singapore use public transport while these values in Britain and Australia are much lower, being 16 per cent and 20 per cent respectively. Less than 20 per cent of students walk to school in Britain and Australia. For Singaporeans, walking is the second popular option, with a quarter of them travelling to school on foot.
A quick glance at the three pie charts provided reveals the relative popularity of various means of
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transport
which
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students
in Britain, Australia and Singapore travel to school.

It is apparent from the information supplied that of
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these method
of travel, the majority is car in Britain and Australia, both accounting for 65 per cent of the
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students
. In stark contrast,
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people
in Singapore,
however
, don’t prefer travel by car, and it is the least popular method of
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transport
, with a merge 10 per cent of the
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students
. There are considerable differences in the percentage of public
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transport
. A large figure of
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students
in Singapore
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use
public
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transport
while these values in Britain and Australia are much lower, being 16 per cent and 20 per cent
respectively
. Less than 20 per cent of
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students
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walk
to school in Britain and Australia. For Singaporeans, walking is the second popular option, with a quarter of them travelling to school on foot.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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