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The diagram below shows how the parts of old car batteries are used to create new car batteries and other products. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram below shows how the parts of old car batteries are used to create new car batteries and other products.
The picture illustrates how old car batteries are recycled to generate new batteries and other materials. Overall, it is noticeable from the diagram that there are several stages beginning with the collection of batteries from garages and ending with the production of new car batteries, glass and textiles. At the first stage of creating batteries, old batteries from garages are delivered to a recycling factory by a truck. The solid components are then separated from acid liquid in order for the manufacture of new ones. The process continues with crushing plastic cases into plastic pellets and then new case is produced. Meanwhile, lead grids are put into a furnace, where lead is melted and is ready for the production of new grids. At the final stage, new battery is created by the combination of new cases and new grids with the addition of acid. Besides new batteries, the first steps of making other products is adding chemicals into battery acid liquid. Next, solid crystal is formed, which is prior to the new products, namely glass and textiles.
The picture illustrates how
old
car batteries
are recycled
to generate
new
batteries and other materials.

Overall
, it is noticeable from the diagram that there are several stages beginning with the collection of batteries from garages and ending with the production of
new
car batteries, glass and textiles.

At the
first
stage of creating batteries,
old
batteries from garages
are delivered
to a recycling factory by a truck. The solid components are then separated from acid liquid in order for the manufacture of
new
ones. The process continues with crushing plastic cases into plastic pellets and then
new
case
is produced
. Meanwhile, lead grids
are put
into a furnace, where lead
is melted
and is ready for the production of
new
grids. At the final stage,
new
battery
is created
by the combination of
new
cases and
new
grids with the addition of acid.

Besides
new
batteries, the
first
steps of making other products is adding chemicals into battery acid liquid.
Next
, solid crystal
is formed
, which is prior to the
new
products,
namely
glass and textiles.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how the parts of old car batteries are used to create new car batteries and other products.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
177 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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