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The charts below show the primary purposes for British people leaving their country in 1999 and the amount of those people who left the country for less than a week. v.2

The charts below show the primary purposes for British people leaving their country in 1999 and the amount of those people who left the country for less than a week. v. 2
The bar graphs compare the two main reasons why British people went abroad in 1999 and the number of those who came back within a week. Overall, as the age rises the more British leave the country for work/study, while the opposite trend could be seen for those leaving for holiday. It is also noticeable that the highest percentage of people returning within a week belongs to the age category of below 20, whereas the age group of 25-30 comprised the lowest figure. Leaving the country for holiday was the most common reason for those under 20 at 80%, while this age comprised the least number for work/study at 10%. The proportion of those who went abroad for a holiday in the age category of 25-30 was nearly 3 times higher than those who left for work/study at just over a fifth. Above 40 had the highest figure of people going abroad for work/study at 70% but it also comprised the smallest number for British who left for a holiday at 30%. Returning within a week was commonly observed for those under 20 at approximately 65% but the 25-30-year-old group had the least number of cases at 35 %. The figures for 20-25, 35-40 and above 40 were about a half, nearly 40% and just over 40% respectively.
The bar graphs compare the two main reasons why British
people
went abroad in 1999 and the
number
of those
who
came back within a week.

Overall
, as the
age
rises the more British
leave
the country for
work/study
, while the opposite trend could be
seen
for those leaving for
holiday
. It is
also
noticeable that the highest percentage of
people
returning within a week belongs to the
age
category of below 20, whereas the
age
group of 25-30 comprised the lowest figure.

Leaving the country for
holiday
was the most common reason for those under 20 at 80%, while this
age
comprised the least
number
for
work/study
at 10%. The proportion of those
who
went abroad for a
holiday
in the
age
category of 25-30 was
nearly
3 times higher than those
who
left
for
work/study
at
just
over a fifth. Above 40 had the highest figure of
people
going abroad for
work/study
at 70%
but
it
also
comprised the smallest
number
for British
who
left
for a
holiday
at 30%.

Returning within a week was
commonly
observed for those under 20 at approximately 65%
but
the 25-30-year-
old
group had the least
number
of cases at 35 %. The figures for 20-25, 35-40 and above 40 were about a half,
nearly
40% and
just
over 40%
respectively
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the primary purposes for British people leaving their country in 1999 and the amount of those people who left the country for less than a week. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
218 words
6.5
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