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The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013. v.2

The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013. v. 2
The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013. It is clear that the majority of Americans ate in fast food restaurants between once a week and once a month in all three years. We can also see a shift towards eating in these restaurants less frequently by the end of the 10-year period. In each of the years shown on the chart, close to 60% of people in the US ate in fast food restaurants between once and four times a month. Roughly 15 to 20% of Americans reported eating in fast food outlets several times per week, while 3 to 4% of people ate in these outlets daily. At the other end of the scale, around 4% of people avoided fast food restaurants completely. Between 2006 and 2013, the total proportion of Americans who ate in fast food establishments either once a week or several times a week fell by almost 10%. At the same time, there was an increase of around 8% in the ‘once or twice a month’ category. In other words, the weekly fast food habit that was common in 2003 and 2006 became a monthly or twice monthly habit in 2013.
The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans
ate
in
fast
food
establishments from 2003 to 2013.

It is
clear
that the majority of Americans
ate
in
fast
food
restaurants
between
once
a
week
and
once
a month in all three years. We can
also
see
a shift towards eating in these
restaurants
less
frequently
by the
end
of the 10-year period.

In each of the years shown on the chart, close to 60% of
people
in the US
ate
in
fast
food
restaurants
between
once
and four
times
a month. Roughly 15 to 20% of Americans reported eating in
fast
food
outlets several
times
per
week
, while 3 to 4% of
people
ate
in these outlets daily. At the other
end
of the scale, around 4% of
people
avoided
fast
food
restaurants
completely.

Between 2006 and 2013, the total proportion of Americans who
ate
in
fast
food
establishments either
once
a
week
or several
times
a
week
fell by almost 10%. At the same
time
, there was an increase of around 8% in the
‘once
or twice a month’ category.
In other words
, the weekly
fast
food
habit that was common in 2003 and 2006 became a monthly or twice monthly habit in 2013.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013. v. 2

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206 words
6.5
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