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The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time excluding email Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.4

The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time excluding email
The given illustrations provide information about the amount of time that two age groups spend on different internet activities in their leisure time. As can be seen in the diagrams young people from 18 to 26 years spend most of their time social networking and accessing music or films, while seniors from 60 to 70 years prefer researching, for example on health data and making bookings for instance on cinema or travel. The supplied data clearly shows that a large number of young people select social networking and accessing music or films on internet with around a one quarter and 21 per cent respectively. Besides that, researching and playing games are also significantly popular among youngsters. It is interesting to note, that only 5 per cent spend time making bookings and 12 per cent making purchases. As is presented in the second chart, seniors who are aged from 60 to 70, most of their time spend on researching and making bookings with 26 and 29 per cent respectively. It is worth noticing, that playing games are not as popular as social networking, although there is only 2 per cent distinction among them. Furthermore, the percentage of making purchases is almost equal as accessing music or films. In general, younger adults would rather spend their free time social networking or accessing music or films, than making bookings, while elder person prefer researching and making bookings.
The
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given
illustrations provide information about the amount of
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time
that two age groups
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spend
on
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different
internet activities in their leisure
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time
. As can be
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seen
in the diagrams young
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people
from 18 to 26 years
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spend
most of their
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time
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social
networking and
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accessing
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music
or films, while seniors from 60 to 70 years prefer
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researching
,
for example
on health data and making bookings
for instance
on cinema or travel.

The supplied data
clearly
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shows
that
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a large number of
young
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people
select
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social
networking and
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accessing
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music
or films on internet with around a one quarter and 21 per cent
respectively
.
Besides
that,
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researching
and playing games are
also
significantly
popular among youngsters. It is interesting to note, that
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only
5 per cent
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spend
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time
making bookings and 12 per cent making
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purchases
.

As
is presented
in the second chart, seniors who
are aged
from 60 to 70, most of their
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time
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spend
on
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researching
and making bookings with 26 and 29 per cent
respectively
. It is worth noticing, that playing games are not as popular as
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social
networking, although there is
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only
2 per cent distinction among them.
Furthermore
, the percentage of making
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purchases
is almost equal as
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accessing
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music
or films.

In general
, younger adults would
rather
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spend
their free
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time
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social
networking or
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accessing
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music
or films, than making bookings, while elder person prefer
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researching
and making bookings.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time excluding email

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4 paragraphs
234 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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