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The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time (excluding email). v.3

The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time (excluding email). v. 3
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of free time of young and elderly people used for different internet activities including email services. It can be seen from the graph that, the youngsters, belonging to 18 to 26 age group, spent their good proportion of 24% of surfing time to carry out social networking. Whereas the elderly belongs to 60 to 70 years age group and they used their 25% quality browsing time to call on cinema or travel booking websites. At the same time, merely 5%of youth's surfing time used for this purpose. Again, both youngsters and old people spent an almost same percentage of time to get into researching purposes. It was 20% and 22% respectively. The most interesting phenomenon had noticed from this pie chart is both groups spent exactly 12% of their browsing time on purchasing online. Next, elderly spend their 21%of surfing time to call on social networking. Whereas the youth spent an exactly same percentage, that is 21% for access music and films. However, only 15%of elderly surfing time had used for visit music sites. The least interesting elderly online activity was playing games. They spent measure 5%of their browsing time for the same. On the other hand, for youth, 18% time spent for their browsing time used for not other than playing games. Overall, the most interesting internet activity of youth was social networking. Cinema and travel booking was the favourite online activity of elderly. However, this was the least interested internet activity of youth. Though both are spent different time for various activities, online purchase times of elderly and youth were exactly the same.
The
given
pie charts illustrate the proportion of free
time
of young and
elderly
people
used
for
different
internet
activities
including email services.

It can be
seen
from the graph that, the youngsters, belonging to 18 to 26 age group,
spent
their
good
proportion of 24% of surfing
time
to carry out social networking. Whereas the
elderly
belongs to 60 to 70 years age
group and
they
used
their 25% quality
browsing
time
to call on cinema or travel booking websites. At the same
time
,
merely
5%of youth's surfing
time
used
for this purpose. Again, both youngsters and
old
people
spent
an almost same percentage of
time
to
get
into researching purposes. It was 20% and 22%
respectively
. The most interesting phenomenon had noticed from this pie chart is both groups
spent
exactly 12% of their
browsing
time
on purchasing online.

Next
,
elderly
spend their 21%of surfing
time
to call on social networking. Whereas the
youth
spent
an exactly same percentage,
that is
21% for access music and films.
However
,
only
15%of
elderly
surfing
time
had
used
for visit music sites. The least interesting
elderly
online
activity
was playing games. They
spent
measure 5%of their
browsing
time
for the same.
On the other hand
, for
youth
, 18%
time
spent
for their
browsing
time
used
for not other than playing games.

Overall
, the most interesting internet
activity
of
youth
was social networking. Cinema and travel booking was the
favourite
online
activity
of
elderly
.
However
, this was the least interested internet
activity
of
youth
. Though both are
spent
different
time
for various
activities
, online
purchase
times
of
elderly
and
youth
were exactly the same.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time (excluding email). v. 3

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272 words
6.0
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