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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. v.2

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. v. 2
The line chart illustrates the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros had changed from 2006 to 2010. Overall, it is clear that the share price of the companies remained slightly over the period of 4 years, despite major fluctuations. As can be seen that, the share price stood at EUR 13 at the beginning of the year 2016. However, this figure rose sharply during the year and peaking at just over EUR 30 at the end of the year. By the beginning of 2018, although there were a decline and some fluctuations in the share price, this figure had then grown substantially to the same price of the ending year 2016 to the middle of the year 2018. Regarding from the chart, by the end of the year 2018, the share price had plummeted to approximately EUR 6. However, during two years later, Outokumpu companies saw a steady growth to EUR 12 to the end of the period, Despite some minor fluctuations.
The line chart illustrates the
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of the
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remained
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that, the
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stood at EUR 13 at the beginning of the
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2016.
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during the
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and peaking at
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over EUR 30 at the
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of the
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. By the beginning of 2018, although there were a decline and
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fluctuations in the
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, this figure had then grown
substantially
to the same
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of the ending
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2016 to the middle of the
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2018.

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2018, the
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had plummeted to approximately EUR 6.
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, during two years later,
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a steady growth to EUR 12 to the
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of the period, Despite
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some
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010. v. 2

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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