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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. v.2

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. v. 2
The bar chart depicts how many tourists using three types of airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000. Overall, the number of visitors using Newark and LaGuardia airports rose, while the figure for John F airport fluctuated. It is also clear that the LaGuardia was the most popular airport over the period of 6 years. In 1995, New York City witnessed the highest level of visitors using LaGuardia airport, at approximately 35 million of passengers. Jonh F Kennedy was the second with just above 25 million of passengers and only 15 million of passengers using Newark airport. By 1997, the number of travellers using John F Kennedy, LaGuardia and Newark had risen steadily, at just over 45 million and just over and under 40 million of passengers respectively. During three years later, LaGaurdia airport, which was the most widely enjoyed, saw a significant increase in the number of travellers with a peak at 70 million of passengers in 2000. In contrast, the number of travellers using John F Kennedy and Newark airports had remained stable over the period of 3 years, despite a drop of 30 million of passengers using John F Kennedy airport in 1999.
The bar chart depicts how
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many
tourists using three types of
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airports
in New York City from 1995 to 2000.
Overall
, the
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number
of visitors using Newark and LaGuardia
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airports
rose, while the figure for John F
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airport
fluctuated. It is
also
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clear
that the LaGuardia was the most popular
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airport
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over
the period of 6 years.

In 1995, New York City witnessed the highest level of visitors using LaGuardia
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airport
, at approximately 35
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million
of
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passengers
.
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Jonh
F Kennedy was the second with
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just
above 25
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million
of
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passengers
and
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only
15
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million
of
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passengers
using Newark
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airport
. By 1997, the
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number
of
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travellers
using John F Kennedy, LaGuardia and Newark had risen
steadily
, at
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just
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over
45
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million
and
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just
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over
and under 40
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million
of
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passengers
respectively
.

During three years later,
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LaGaurdia
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airport
, which was the most
widely
enjoyed,
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saw
a significant increase in the
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number
of
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travellers
with a peak at 70
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million
of
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passengers
in 2000.
In contrast
, the
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number
of
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travellers
using John F Kennedy and Newark
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airports
had remained stable
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over
the period of 3 years, despite a drop of 30
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million
of
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passengers
using John F Kennedy
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airport
in 1999.
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30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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