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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v.2

Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 2
The plans, A and B, illustrate the refurbishment of a health centre in two different years (2005 and the present). Overall, there have been massive changes in the health centre over the period given. The centre has clearly been enlarged and its layout has also been changed to meet the demand. In 2005, the main entrance was located in front of the health centre with 12 car parking spaces outside. From the main entrance, there were some seats along the hallway for clients to wait for consultation. At the end of the hallway, there was a reception desk for clients to register. In addition, an office and a consultation room were located on the left of the desk, and on its right, there were two more consultation rooms. Finally, a physiotherapy room was built behind the desk. In the present day, the layout of the centre has been revised. The main entrance is now situated in the left corner of the centre with a reception desk and an area for children to play. Meanwhile, there is a large common area in the middle of the centre for clients where seats are available alongside the wall. All original rooms and a newly added room called the minor operations room, on the other hand, are now allocated to the common area. Finally, the size of the car park increased by twice with 30 spaces.
The plans, A and B, illustrate the refurbishment of a health
centre
in two
different
years (2005 and the present).
Overall
, there have been massive
changes
in the health
centre
over the period
given
. The
centre
has
clearly
been enlarged
and its layout has
also
been
changed
to
meet
the demand.

In 2005, the main entrance
was located
in front of the health
centre
with 12 car parking spaces outside. From the main entrance, there were
some
seats along the hallway for clients to wait for consultation. At the
end
of the hallway, there was a reception desk for clients to register.
In addition
, an office and a consultation
room
were located
on the
left
of the desk, and on its right, there were two more consultation
rooms
.
Finally
, a physiotherapy
room
was built
behind the desk.

In the present day, the layout of the
centre
has
been revised
. The main entrance is
now
situated in the
left
corner of the
centre
with a reception desk and an area for children to play. Meanwhile, there is a large common area in the middle of the
centre
for clients where seats are available alongside the wall. All original
rooms
and a
newly
added
room
called the minor operations
room
,
on the other hand
, are
now
allocated to the common area.
Finally
, the size of the car park increased by twice with 30 spaces.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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