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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v.4

Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 4
The illustration compares that arrangement of the health centre's rooms and facilities in 2005 and in the present day. It can be observed that the health centre has been renovated and it has more rooms and less space for garden these days compared to that of 2005. According to the plan A, in 2005, the health centre's car park could cater only twelve motor vehicles. From the entrance of the building, the reception desk was at the centre of the building and that was surrounded by three consultation rooms and the office. There are seats for people at the left side of the entrance in the reception room. The hospital also had a physiotherapy room which was located behind the second consulting room. Moreover, the garden outside the building was quite wide and surrounded the health centre. The renovation took place in the hospital and nowadays there are additional facilities in the health centre such as operating room for minor procedures and a place for children's recreation. Now the parking area can accommodate thirty cars and wider compared to their carpark area in the year 2005. It can also be observed that some changes were made in the reception room. Moreover, its entrance is relocated at the left-side of the building as well as its reception desk which is a few steps away from their entrance door. A new consultancy room was added and today, the health centre can perform minor operations as they have a dedicated operation room adjacent to the office and just beside the physiotherapy room.
The illustration compares that arrangement of the
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health
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centre
's
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rooms
and facilities in 2005 and in the present day. It can
be observed
that the
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health
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centre
has
been renovated
and it has more
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rooms
and less space for garden these days compared to that of 2005.

According to the plan A, in 2005, the
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health
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centre
's car park could cater
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only
twelve motor vehicles. From the
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entrance
of the
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building
, the
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reception
desk was at the
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centre
of the
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building
and that
was surrounded
by three consultation
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rooms
and the office. There are seats for
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people
at the
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left
side of the
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entrance
in the
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reception
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room
. The hospital
also
had a physiotherapy
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room
which
was located
behind the second consulting
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room
.
Moreover
, the garden outside the
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building
was quite wide and surrounded the
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health
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centre
.

The renovation took place in the hospital and nowadays there are additional facilities in the
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centre
such as operating
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room
for minor procedures and a place for children's recreation.
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Now
the parking area can accommodate thirty cars and wider compared to their
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carpark
area in the year 2005. It can
also
be observed
that
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some
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changes
were made
in the
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reception
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room
.
Moreover
, its
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entrance
is relocated
at the
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left
-side of the
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building
as well
as its
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reception
desk which is a few steps away from their
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entrance
door. A new consultancy
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room
was
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added
and
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today
, the
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centre
can perform minor operations as they have a dedicated operation
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room
adjacent to the office and
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just
beside the physiotherapy
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room
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS academic Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 4

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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