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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v.3

Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 3
The two illustrations show the previous and the latest plans for a health centre in 2005 and in the present day. In 2005, the main entrance was located in front of the health centre with 12 car parking spaces outside. From the main entrance, there were a number of seats where clients could sit and wait for consultation. Moreover, there were three large consulting rooms and an office where clients could be accommodated and a reception desk in the far corner from the entrance. From there, there was a physiotherapy room, located behind the reception desk where clients undergo musculoskeletal rehabilitation. In the present day plan, the health centre is revised in this way. Both the entrance and reception desk are transferred in the left corner of the health centre and a playing area created opposite to the reception desk. They added another room for consulting purposes but not as large as the previous plan before. Likewise, spaces are expanded for car parking up to 30 slots. While the office and the physiotherapy room are in their original structure, a minor operating room is added beside the latter. To sum up, the present day plan is constructed with more rooms added although smaller in size compared in the past.
The two illustrations
show
the previous and the latest
plans
for a
health
centre
in 2005 and in the present day.

In 2005, the main
entrance
was located
in front of the
health
centre
with 12 car parking spaces outside. From the main
entrance
, there were a number of seats where clients could sit and wait for consultation.
Moreover
, there were three large consulting
rooms
and an office where clients could
be accommodated
and a
reception
desk
in the far corner from the
entrance
. From there, there was a physiotherapy
room
, located behind the
reception
desk
where clients undergo musculoskeletal rehabilitation.

In the present day
plan
, the
health
centre
is revised
in this way. Both the
entrance
and
reception
desk
are transferred
in the
left
corner of the
health
centre
and a playing area created opposite to the
reception
desk
. They
added
another
room
for consulting purposes
but
not as large as the previous
plan
before
.
Likewise
, spaces
are expanded
for car parking up to 30

slots
. While the office and the physiotherapy
room
are in their original structure, a minor operating
room
is
added
beside the latter. To sum up, the present day
plan
is constructed
with more
rooms
added
although
smaller in size
compared in the past.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. v. 3

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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