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The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work v.2

The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work v. 2
The maps illustrate a proposed change for ground floor work of a house. First of all, there will be kitchen furniture added in the kitchen on the west wing. There is an internal door on the top right side of the kitchen near the west entrance door, and an internal wall the right which separates the kitchen and the hall. The internal door will be changed to double doors and moved to the bottom right side, near the south entrance door. Secondly, the stairs in the hall will be altered to spiral stairs which is bigger than the previous one. The storage under the stairs will be removed to free up some space needed for the spiral stairs. The internal wall and the internal door separating the hall and the living room on the right side will be removed. As a result, the hall will be no longer there because it is merged with the living room.
The maps illustrate a proposed
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change
for
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ground floor
work of a
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house
.

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First of all
, there will be
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kitchen
furniture
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added
in the
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kitchen
on the west wing. There is an
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internal
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door
on the top
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right
side of the
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kitchen
near the west entrance
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door
, and an
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internal
wall the
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right
which separates the
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kitchen
and the
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hall
. The
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internal
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door
will be
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changed
to double
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doors
and
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moved
to the bottom
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right
side, near the south entrance door.

Secondly
, the stairs in the
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hall
will
be altered
to spiral stairs which is bigger than the previous one. The storage under the stairs will
be removed
to free up
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some
space needed for the spiral stairs. The
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internal
wall and the
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internal
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door
separating the
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hall
and the living room on the
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right
side will
be removed
.
As a result
, the
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hall
will be no longer there
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because
it
is merged
with the living room.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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