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the charts below show the number and types of books bought by men and women and four different age groups in the uk v.2

the charts below show the number and types of books bought by men and women and four different age groups in the uk v. 2
the charts give information about the types of books that British men and women and different age groups buy. the initial impression from the charts is that women tend to buy more books than men overall. Although they buy slightly fewer non-fiction books. the people that buy the most books are in the 45+ age group. Nearly 60% of women buy fiction, which is almost twice as many as the number of men who choose this type of book. Nevertheless, most age groups buy more fiction books than non-fiction ones showing that non-fiction is generally less popular than fiction. the number of people buying fiction increases steadily from ages 16 to 45 with the lowest number of books, at just over 40% of the age group, bought by 16 to 24 years old and the highest number, at just over 50%, bought by over 45 s. however, the pattern is different for no-fiction. the number of books bought by 25 to 44 years old is significantly much far than the number bought by 16 to 24 years old and those over 45. just over 40% of 16 to 24 years old buy non-fiction, but this number is not as high as the number of people aged 45 and over buying non-fiction, at nearly 60%. only 31% of 35 to 44 years old buy non-fiction, and the number of 25 to 34 years old is as lower at 28%.
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is as lower at 28%.
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IELTS academic the charts below show the number and types of books bought by men and women and four different age groups in the uk v. 2

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