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The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK. v. 1

The bar graph outlines the female unemployment rates in four counties in the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Generally speaking, 5 to 7 percent women in these provinces were jobless in 2013 and in a year this rate dropped slightly except in Scotland. According to the given illustration, 6. 8 percent women in England were jobless in 2013 which was higher than the female unemployment rates in Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland. Female unemployment ratio in Wales was 5. 4 % which was the lowest among the given counties. The ratio of unemployed females in Scotland and Northern Ireland stood at 6. 1% and 5. 6% respective. After a year, the unemployment ratio among females in England, Wales and Northern Ireland dropped by 0. 2% to 0. 4% and stayed between 4. 6 to 6. 5 percentages but it actually increases in Scotland. The rate of unemployed females in Scotland became the highest in 2014 which was 6. 7%.   the lowest unemployment among female could be observed in Northern Ireland in this year.

IELTS academic The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK. v.1

The bar graph outlines the female unemployment rates in four counties in the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
Generally
speaking, 5 to 7 percent women in these provinces were jobless in 2013 and in a year this rate dropped
slightly
except in Scotland. According to the
given
illustration, 6. 8 percent women in England were jobless in 2013 which was higher than the female unemployment rates in Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland. Female unemployment ratio in Wales was 5. 4 % which was the lowest among the
given
counties. The ratio of unemployed females in Scotland and Northern Ireland stood at 6. 1% and 5. 6% respective. After a year, the unemployment ratio among females in England, Wales and Northern Ireland dropped by 0. 2% to 0. 4% and stayed between 4. 6 to 6. 5 percentages
but
it actually increases in Scotland. The rate of unemployed females in Scotland became the highest in 2014 which was 6. 7%.
 
the
lowest unemployment among female could
be observed
in Northern Ireland in this year.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
3 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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